Poem about riches, sort of

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Meant to be a picture book. Too serious?

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About Judith L. Roth

When I was about ten, it occurred to me that books are written by people and I was a person. I could create my favorite things–I could write books! I got a B.A. in English. My first poem was accepted for publication before I graduated. I had some success with poetry, but my real dream was to write fiction for children. My first fiction piece was accepted about 25 years after the first submission. Things you might want to know about me: I know how to persevere. I’m a third-generation California native, living in Indiana. I have two remarkable sons who are now young men,and a husband who’s supported my writing for over three decades. I love cats and currently have three of them. I love being near water–oceans, lakes, rivers all work for me. Chocolate is probably my biggest downfall. I’m exceptionally curious. (Or nosy, as my family calls it.)

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  1. Hi, I really like the poem, but it’s not finished. It’s too adult-ish. I can see an end, sad as it may seem, but it needs a clear finish for the children who I see observing the scene. Like each of them having jobs around the castle later. Like carrying saddles, cooking the soup, holding hands, working together. Having a family– and serving the king. If that’s the end you see.Dori http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yR7Ax2dBroo http://www.dorisholikkelly.com Encounter the historic MACKINAC TRIANGLE Book 1. Mystery of the Copper TurtleBook 2. Mystery of the Voyageur’s Rendezvous Book 3. Mystery of the Bone Scavengers

  2. Hi Judy,
    As an adult reading the poem I got caught up in the lovely imagery and language, never imagining it to be the basis for a picture book. And although children would love the whole king/castle/knights idea, the image of plague bubbling where they live might be rather scary for a child. Plus, we want to encourage children to feel good about themselves and not think of themselves as lowly or less-than even when compared to royalty. So I do feel it’s a tad too serious for a picture book at this point.

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